Bloody Mary Returns
A Montana Ghost Story
Retold by S.E. Schlosser
My stepmother was vile. I guess most kids think that when their father remarries. But in this case, it was true. She only married Father because he was rich, and she hated children. There were three of us – me (Marie), my middle brother Richard and my youngest brother Charles. We were the price my stepmother Gerta paid for being rich. And we were all that stood between her and inheriting Father's money when he died. So she took steps against us.
She sent my youngest brother Charles away to boarding school overseas. It had a good, scholarly reputation, but it also had the reputation for being a hard school that was full of bullies and strict discipline. Not a place where a delicate child like Charles, who had been sickly as a baby, would thrive. He was miserable there. Somehow, Gerta contrived to keep him there for all but the summer holidays, and when he came home the first year he was pale and thin with dark circles under his eyes that looked like bruises. He cried – he actually cried! – when Father told him he had to go back to the school. But Father didn’t listen to him. Gerta thought it would be good for Charles to go there, and so Charles went.
I did everything I could – encouraging letters and daily phone calls – until Gerta said it was too expensive and restricted calls to five minutes once a month. I even got Father to book me a ticket to Europe so I could visit Charles. Gerta was enraged when she found out. Her blue eyes went so cold it made chills run up my spine, and her pink mouth thinned into a bitter line that bade ill for me since I had dared to interfere. Two days before my plane left for Europe, the school called and told us that Charles had climbed up to the tallest tower and flung himself off. He was dead.
Father was shocked, of course, and Gerta was quietly triumphant. For a few months, Father paid more attention to Richard and myself then he had since our mother died. But Gerta was beautiful and had winning ways about her that soon drew my Father’s attention away. And now that one of her hated step-children was dead, she focused on another. Poor Richard was next.
Richard was a sturdy chap who was about to enter high school, and he was really into sports. He would have thrived at the boarding school that had killed Charles. So Gerta sent him to an arts school instead. He hated it, but Gerta had told Father he had “talent”, so there he went. (You’d think my Father would have learned his lesson with Charles!) But Richard was a survivor, and he grimly practiced piano and violin when he would rather have played soccer and football. But Gerta was clever. She introduced Richard to a couple of high school boys who were everything Richard craved to be – rich, popular, on the football team. And into drugs. Gerta made sure Richard had a very large allowance, and kept increasing it as Richard was drawn deeper and deeper under the influence. Until one day Richard overdosed, and Gerta only had one step-child left. Me.
I was sure (sure!) that Gerta knew Richard was doing drugs in his room that day. She knew he was ill and possibly dying in there. If she’d “found” him even ten minutes sooner, his life would have been saved. So said the doctor, and I believed him. But Father wouldn’t believe me. He was angry whenever I said anything against Gerta, and told me to hold my tongue. Still, I knew I was next, and I was sure that Father would not live long after willing his fortune over to his wife. I decided that if Gerta got too bad, I would run away and live secretly with my aunt in New Jersey until I turned 18.
From the moment Richard’s body was found in his room, I forced myself to be a model child. My homework was done on time, I was polite to Gerta and all her friends, I went on all the family excursions with Gerta and Father – even the dangerous ones like shark-fishing. You can be sure that I took care to be “sea-sick” indoors and stayed away from the edge of the boat. Gerta was clever with her tricks. Everyone thought it was an accident the time we were out shopping and I fell onto the subway in front of an oncoming train. I managed to roll out of the way on time, but it was way too close for comfort.
I had almost decided to run away when my father brought me the sad news that my aunt in New Jersey had died suddenly in her sleep, poisoned by person or persons unknown. I was appalled. How had Gerta known? But she had – I could tell from the smirk on her face.
I went to my room that night and locked myself in to think. I could run away, but the money wouldn’t last long. And I’d need to finish high school or my chances of getting a good job were nil. Besides, Gerta would still be out there somewhere. If she could hire someone to poison my only living relative (besides Father), she could hire someone to kill me, whether I was living at home or not.
There was only one thing I could think of. And it was a terrible thing. A family secret passed down from my Mother’s side for many generations. It involved a witch named Bloody Mary, who had once tried to kill my many times great grandmother and use the child’s blood to make herself young and beautiful forever. The witch had been stopped by the child's father (my many times great grandfather) in the nick of time, and the witch had cursed him as she burned at the stake. Cursed his mirror, and the mirrors of all the men who had condemned her to death at the stake, so that anyone saying her name in front of those mirrors would invoke her vengeful spirit.
The story had gotten mixed up over the years, as it was passed down first in their village and then all over the country. These days, school kids everywhere scared themselves silly chanting Bloody Mary’s name in front of darkened mirrors during sleepover parties, and nothing happened to them. So no one really believed in the curse. Of course, no one knew the real story of Bloody Mary. That was a deep secret handed down by the villagers of long ago. But I was a direct descendant, and I knew how to summon the witch. You had to use a mirror owned by someone in the direct blood-line of one of the original families that lived in Bloody Mary’s village. And the witch's name must be spoken by candlelight a certain number of times in their native tongue.
It was an evil thing to do, I knew. But it was the only way to save my life. It was either Gerta or me. If I didn’t fight back, I was dead. So I took my hard earned money and went out to a specialty store to buy hand-dipped, beeswax candles. Black ones. I followed my mother’s directions carefully, placing them at certain intervals around the living room so that they reflected in the huge mirror behind the couch. Then I lit each one, speaking the spell passed down in my mother’s family. And I waited. Father was away on a business trip, and Gerta was out at a party with her latest boyfriend. She came home late, and scolded me for staying up to study. Her voice was playful and light – I hated that voice. It made her sound like she was nice. But there was also a note of suspicion underlying her words, and she stared hard at the flickering black candles.
“Holding a séance, little Marie?” she asked, emphasizing the word little, knowing I hated when she called me that.
“I just like working by candlelight,” I said mendaciously, turning a page in my text book.
Gerta frowned. “You know, little Marie, I think it’s time we had a talk,” she said, walking over to the mirror behind the couch and primping her hair.
“Yes,” I said softly. “We should. You killed my brothers. And my aunt. But I won’t let you kill me.”
Gerta laughed. “As if you stood a chance against me!” she said, fluffing her long blond hair up behind her shoulders.
I spoke the name of Bloody Mary in the native tongue of my ancestors. Once. Twice. Three times. Inside the mirror, the image of Gerta burst into flames, and another face looked out. It was the malevolent face of a twisted old crone, ruined with age, and altogether evil. I ducked behind the chair as Gerta gave a scream of sheer terror, her eyes fixed on the witch. As I watched from my hiding place, heat burst forth from the mirror, blistering her beautiful alabaster skin. I could hear the flames roaring as the witch laughed evilly and held out her arms toward my step mother.
“Gerta,” crooned Bloody Mary. “Come to me, Gerta.”
And she took my step mother into her arms.
Gerta’s terrified scream was suddenly cut off. The flames disappeared as suddenly as they had come. When I peeked out from behind the couch, Gerta and Bloody Mary were gone.
I called Father at his hotel the next morning to tell him that Gerta hadn’t slept at home. (Well, it was true!) He wasn’t pleased. He called a few of her friends from his hotel room, and quickly discovered she had been carrying on with another man. With several, if the truth be known. Father hated infidelity. He flew home at once to confront Gerta, but she was still missing; presumed run away with one of her flames.
Somehow, Father managed to divorce Gerta without ever trying to find her. And since she had no family in the area except us, everyone accepted the cover story, and no one ever tried to locate her. Gerta was gone for good. And Father and I were safe at last.
You can read more ghost stories in Spooky Campfire Tales and Spooky Montana, by S.E. Schlosser.
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Comments
this story was GREAT! i liked it a lot i liked how he stood up for himself n i liked also were he kills Gerta i love it! its scary too! AAHHHHHH!! =)
Posted by: Sophia | October 17, 2008 10:24 AM
that story was great and it was scary too but i still liked it
Posted by: kendra | October 22, 2008 12:55 PM
LOL good story!!!!!
Posted by: charlotte | October 25, 2008 10:32 AM
This wasn't scary at all!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Rachel | October 25, 2008 12:37 PM
wow so there is the real story greta got killed yay
Posted by: linda | October 25, 2008 06:57 PM
This story was really good. It was kinda scary.
Posted by: marie | October 26, 2008 08:00 AM
OMG I LOVED IT AND IT WAS NOT SCARY
Posted by: sarah | October 26, 2008 05:04 PM
Iloved the story.can youmake a second one
Posted by: Anthony | October 26, 2008 05:15 PM
This story was like so awesome!It was scary and exciting,too.We loved it.I hated when Gerta killed her two brothers.:(
It had a nice beging and ending.:)peace!
Posted by: emily n kynnan | October 26, 2008 07:16 PM
a really scary story and it will be brillant to read on hallwoween night
Posted by: rachel | October 27, 2008 03:55 AM
i didnt read the story but its good!!
Posted by: abigail | October 27, 2008 10:12 AM
Story was good
Posted by: Tyler | October 27, 2008 11:33 AM
i liked it a lot i know how the stepmoms can be because stepdads are like that too. she neede that because of all the harm she made.
Posted by: maria mata | October 27, 2008 01:48 PM
wow nice
Posted by: Anonymous | October 27, 2008 04:18 PM
its ok not that scary more boring at the end
Posted by: beshoy | October 27, 2008 06:29 PM
I love your scary stories
Posted by: valerie cain | October 27, 2008 08:53 PM
OMG! i ♥ this! it iz so0o0o0 co0l! nice storii!!
Posted by: SKittLz | October 28, 2008 07:38 AM
this storie was good and very scary i mean a step mom killing her kids 4 money that was kinda origanil but the end was great
Posted by: kyrstin | October 28, 2008 11:39 AM
Hey! OMG your story was fantastic i loved it i think all the people that read it think that too.
Posted by: dayana | October 28, 2008 06:27 PM
that was wicked and wierd at the same time but i still liked it but although it was not scary lol
Posted by: karina gutierrez | October 28, 2008 08:23 PM
hi
Posted by: ryan | October 29, 2008 04:47 AM
Hi~ I am korean..
I am finding scary story
Posted by: 장주은julia | October 29, 2008 07:20 AM
this wasnt scary!! it was good tho...but not scary in the least little bit
Posted by: Matt | October 29, 2008 09:49 AM
this story is really great it realy keep me in ♥
Posted by: kota | October 29, 2008 12:31 PM
loved it
Posted by: Alvin Ha | October 29, 2008 12:38 PM
This story is great i love it
Posted by: kiki | October 29, 2008 12:47 PM
that was a good story
Posted by: ariana | October 29, 2008 12:54 PM
Omg - Fabulous! Could be a bit more scary though! Im glad Greta died =]
Posted by: hyjuk | October 29, 2008 01:30 PM
is this a true story and it is quite scary!!!
Posted by: ikra | October 29, 2008 01:32 PM
I'am not scared of one scary movie nor story
Posted by: Anonymous | October 29, 2008 01:45 PM
that bloddy mary story was interesting but not to scary!i would like to hear it at night. but not just any night. a dark, scary,starless,and stormy night. i would like to scare the crap out of some of my friends. ye hehehehehe. mwa ha ha ha!!!
Posted by: lauren | October 29, 2008 01:52 PM
The story is so good! I am having some friends round for a halloween party and I am going to tell them the stiory!
Posted by: Katy | October 30, 2008 04:22 AM
I really liked it. Except it wasn't that scary. It's perfect, actually. Scared my cousin a lot. You should make a second one, and probably scarier and more... intense. Saddening at the part where in the brothers died.
Posted by: emcee | October 30, 2008 05:25 AM
awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:)
Posted by: tyieshia | October 30, 2008 08:20 AM
i love bloody mary it is very scary. but i dont care
Posted by: ripley haney | October 30, 2008 09:13 AM
SCARYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
Posted by: jess | October 30, 2008 10:00 AM
omg this srory was really good it wasnt that scary though. :) :) :) :)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Georgia | October 30, 2008 11:15 AM
I thought this story was so strange not scary but strange.
Posted by: Steven | October 30, 2008 12:21 PM
i love this story
Posted by: kayleigh | October 30, 2008 02:13 PM
this was wack
Posted by: kayla | October 30, 2008 02:16 PM
this is a good story. but it wasn't as scary as i thought it was
Posted by: Ashanti | October 30, 2008 02:19 PM
i ve heard about the whole bloody mary thing but its weird how saying it in the mirror and everyone will actually do it but nothing will happen but they will say it did. The story was great because it tells the truth about everyhting. It was sad that charles commited suicide because of gerta. its a good thing she was gone.
Posted by: Anonymous | October 30, 2008 02:44 PM
this story was REALY SCARY
Posted by: ??????? | October 30, 2008 06:16 PM
wow. that was a great story! cant wiat to read another
Posted by: kayla | October 30, 2008 06:20 PM
lol this is sooooo funny i am telling my friends 2morro!!! :) ♥
Posted by: ♥ sami ♥ xoxo | October 30, 2008 09:04 PM
this story was GREAT but not scary at all try to make it scarier
Posted by: ??????? | October 30, 2008 11:42 PM
I loved this story especially at the end when she bursts into flames :-)
Posted by: Ellie Jones | October 31, 2008 05:12 AM
cool
Posted by: kiki | October 31, 2008 07:21 AM
That wasn't scary
Posted by: ?????????????????????? | October 31, 2008 07:43 AM
omg this story is good but def not scary
Posted by: kia lepeuir | October 31, 2008 08:10 AM
this is scary
Posted by: equan hayes | October 31, 2008 08:19 AM
kewlll
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2008 08:48 AM
this story is good but not so scary
Posted by: KABRINA BROWN | October 31, 2008 09:32 AM
this wasnt scary but it was cool to read but kinda boring so to speak
Posted by: ???????? | October 31, 2008 10:47 AM
IT WAS REALLY GOOD I LIKED IT IT WAS THE FIRST STORY I READ ALL THE WAY THROUGH
Posted by: miranda | October 31, 2008 10:48 AM
THIS STORY WAS A GREAT STORY WHO EVER WROTE THIS KEEP WRITING STORYS LIKE THIS AND U WILL HAVE A LOT OF MONEY.***
Posted by: JAQUELINE GARCIA | October 31, 2008 10:51 AM
this story was nice.....
but i still dont blieve in bloody marry even if every body around me do!
cauz ite heck...........its just for fun????????
that what i think about.....
Posted by: invisible woman | October 31, 2008 10:56 AM
this story was nice.....
but i still dont blieve in bloody marry even if every body around me do!
cauz ite heck...........its just for fun????????
that what i think about..... :)
Posted by: invisible woman | October 31, 2008 10:57 AM
It was the best story ever especially reading it at night in the dark room. Now that would be scary.=)=)=)=)Bloody Mary rock!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2008 11:42 AM
thiz waz a gud story but it waz not scary nd i wondered if Bloody Mary iz real Happy Halloween kidz
Posted by: cinthia | October 31, 2008 12:23 PM
thys story wuz straight but not so scary to me
Posted by: NiNA | October 31, 2008 01:14 PM
THAT WAS SO NOT SCARY I HAVE HEARD BETTER ONE'S THAN THAT...!!!
Posted by: Brianna | October 31, 2008 02:22 PM
this story is not scary.
But is it true?
Posted by: devin | October 31, 2008 03:07 PM
omg this was the best story but i mean a mother killing her kids for money. cant wait 2 tell peopleeeeee about it they will be AMAZED!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 | October 31, 2008 03:28 PM
Hey this story is a great story but I think you should leave Bloody Mary in the story for a little longer
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2008 03:37 PM
wow this story is scary.i cant wait to read another one and see what happends
Posted by: katti | October 31, 2008 03:50 PM
it was kinda scary but i think it was fake.
Posted by: lindsey | October 31, 2008 05:10 PM
WOW this is very scary ILOVE IT♥ forreals.
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2008 05:15 PM
omg!! that was a good story but not that scarry but still it was sooo awsome i♥it
Posted by: anna smith | October 31, 2008 05:15 PM
It was pretty good. i thought it was scary but i've heard scarier
Posted by: Claire | November 1, 2008 01:13 PM
wow this is a great story but i didn't understand it without reading the origanal bloody mary!
Posted by: dylan | November 1, 2008 09:04 PM
Good story do u write professcionally?u should publish that!lol i like it!keep the stories comin
Posted by: claudia | November 2, 2008 10:17 PM
omg that was good but it needs a little more scare..it was too sad
Posted by: Brittany | November 3, 2008 02:03 PM
that is so cool i lv it
Posted by: Anonymous | November 4, 2008 12:45 PM
this story was like so awsome you should write another 1 . yea/
Posted by: Anonymous | November 4, 2008 01:14 PM
cool i am 9year old and veeery scaaaaared!!
Posted by: Anonymous | November 5, 2008 03:24 PM
i would freak if i was marie maybe faint or have like a total breakdown
Posted by: shaquesha miller | November 6, 2008 10:46 AM
i am 11 that is not scary
Posted by: robbie | November 7, 2008 12:37 PM
it was good
Posted by: Anonymous | November 7, 2008 11:03 PM
the last story was also good but this was not so scary nothing scares me
Posted by: Anonymous | November 8, 2008 01:01 PM
this story was..... terific i am only 8 and im not scared of her but her other name is daedly mary............ by faryal
Posted by: faryal | November 8, 2008 03:15 PM
♥im 5 years odl and i read the story all by myslef and it's not scary at all!♥
Posted by: emely | November 8, 2008 07:19 PM
wow,that was way crazy,loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Posted by: ashley | November 8, 2008 07:35 PM
that waz cool !it wazent scary
Posted by: ashley treadwell | November 8, 2008 07:40 PM
OMG I LOVED THIS STORY,it was so cool and interesting
Posted by: stefany | November 8, 2008 08:23 PM
i am 10 thatwasn't scary at all!
Posted by: Ryan | November 9, 2008 09:19 AM
booooo
Posted by: Anonymous | November 12, 2008 04:23 PM
how can you print this i want to scare my friends?!
Posted by: Anonymous | November 13, 2008 02:44 PM
omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | November 13, 2008 07:24 PM
wow that was very scary they should do an even scarier one whooooohoooo was tat fun n cool
Posted by: mia | November 14, 2008 06:27 PM
it was kinda scary at the end
Posted by: carly seely | November 14, 2008 10:44 PM
that was a great story! even though it wasnt scary!!!!!
Posted by: jessica | November 15, 2008 09:57 PM
that total rock it so cool how you use the old bloody mary to get revenged
Posted by: kim mahoney | November 15, 2008 10:10 PM
it was really coooooooooooooool
Posted by: gyhjgj | November 15, 2008 10:14 PM
it was so scary!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: dylan spittle | November 16, 2008 11:06 AM
wow nice read it during skool awsome and scary
Posted by: katherine valenzuela | November 19, 2008 11:59 AM
that story wuz so stupid i dont believe in that stuff ya digg
Posted by: meechie | November 19, 2008 02:18 PM
it is a cool story but is is also scary!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: leah | November 19, 2008 10:32 PM
I think this story not scary
Posted by: chareeneysha | November 20, 2008 03:39 AM
wow is so not true
Posted by: melissa | November 20, 2008 02:46 PM
it was scary cause i tried bloody mary in the room and i saw her spirt why dont u try it.!
Posted by: mary brown | November 21, 2008 09:20 PM
I liked this story. Is it true?
Posted by: miranda | November 22, 2008 01:27 PM
luv it this story is soooooo coooooool!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | November 22, 2008 03:28 PM
Hey I love this stuff I'm so intrested in this stuff please make some more!!!:}
Posted by: bubbles | November 24, 2008 10:32 AM
great story
Posted by: Anonymous | November 24, 2008 01:12 PM
The story was good but it wasnt scary at all... sorry
Posted by: anonymous | November 25, 2008 03:49 PM
omg ilovvvvvvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it
Posted by: Amornrat | November 25, 2008 08:47 PM
it was nice and scary
Posted by: mansoor | November 26, 2008 05:25 AM
this was so cool
Posted by: nmm | November 28, 2008 11:07 AM
ey i loved it, make another 1, this 1 iz like SO cool =D ♥^__^♥
Posted by: Monsoon | November 29, 2008 08:12 PM
this was one of my fave!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Sanya | November 30, 2008 09:53 AM
dear whoever u r,
have u ever played a game with the real B.M.If not y?
Posted by: carissa | November 30, 2008 06:43 PM
IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII lovvvvvveddddddddd it alot
Posted by: Anonymous | December 3, 2008 01:01 AM
OMG IS THAT STORY REALLY REAL? I WAS SO SCARED WHEN I WAS READING IT SO WAS MY FAMILY X JODIE HOUGHTON
Posted by: jodie | December 6, 2008 07:16 PM
Good Story!!! Bloody Marys Creepy!!!
Posted by: Chrissyp7@gmail.com | December 10, 2008 04:05 PM
I loved the story
Posted by: Dianne rojas | December 10, 2008 07:14 PM
omg really scary i shared it with my class due to been a teacher
Posted by: georgina | December 12, 2008 05:26 AM
I loved this story and it was so profound and very nail-biting. Thanks for killing Gerta...she deserved it, that no good, rotten stepmother!
Posted by: Anonymous | December 13, 2008 11:09 AM
since i looooooooooooove scary stories i love this story
Posted by: esme | December 15, 2008 07:55 PM
That story was so cool and scary because BM (Bloody Mary) came out of the mirror!!!
From Lillie!
P.S:I can see ghosts but ssshhh that's a secret!!!!!
Posted by: Lillie | December 18, 2008 08:32 PM
i think i got goose bumps
Posted by: Anonymous | December 20, 2008 12:37 AM
i like the story,its great!
Posted by: justine | December 21, 2008 09:40 PM
It was a awsome stori I just wished richard and charles didnt have to die
Posted by: Mr.chill | December 22, 2008 10:15 PM
AWESOME
Posted by: Scott | December 26, 2008 08:56 AM
I do not think this is scary and I am 9 years old!
Posted by: McKenna | December 28, 2008 09:29 AM
i'm only 12, and that story, isn't even scary at all!psh, ha! even my little 7 year old cousin wouldn't even be scared-at all!
Posted by: Anonymous | December 30, 2008 03:34 PM
love it it was not that scary but it was still cool i hope u get the chills
Posted by: Anonymous | December 31, 2008 07:34 AM
wow good not that scary tho :) :) :) :) :) :) ♥♥♥
Posted by: Anonymous | December 31, 2008 03:05 PM
that was a good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Marc Brown | January 2, 2009 12:31 AM
4 once bloody mary actually did a
good thing!!!!!
Posted by: rebecca | January 2, 2009 09:01 AM
Are you sure that Bloody Mary is real? Have you seen her? My friend said "that she is real." I do believe that she is real.
Posted by: Jasmine | January 3, 2009 02:26 AM
OMG great story. I love it. I am at a slumber party right now so that sure scared them. LOL THANKS
Posted by: Marissa Caraveo | January 4, 2009 02:45 AM
it was kind of scary but i liked it alot. lol :d
Posted by: maire flieec | January 4, 2009 05:21 PM
wow thats a good story!!!
Posted by: carlos | January 4, 2009 08:55 PM
this is a great story it was scary and i enjoyed it.
Posted by: margaret bubar | January 6, 2009 02:01 PM
great story andwho ever says it sucks is retarded
Posted by: velano | January 6, 2009 05:56 PM
IM scared of Bm ppl in ma school say dat bm used 2 live in my scool cause dat scool used to be her house and a hospital now dey say it now hauts in da
BAThroom but boys wen in and never ever came back n now the boys in the bathroom here them say justin justinnnn !!
Posted by: Anonymous | January 6, 2009 08:35 PM
hey now that was a good story but it doesnt sound all that true...but you should still write a book about that someday!!!!!!=)
Posted by: noah | January 6, 2009 10:30 PM
great story my fav part was the end when mary was calling her name to come would have been awesome if gerta came back from dead and killed her and her father for what they done to her but over all story was great
Posted by: kayla | January 8, 2009 08:39 PM
i love this story but it is not real
Posted by: ashley | January 8, 2009 08:50 PM
i love this story but it is not real
Posted by: ashley | January 8, 2009 08:50 PM
This story was NOT scary at all.
Posted by: Amber | January 10, 2009 07:42 PM
Brilliant Storie
Posted by: Georgia | January 10, 2009 08:01 PM
Not scary, but i like it a lot. Im only 11. I bet my little 7-year-old bro will be scared,tho.
Posted by: Aleaa | January 14, 2009 02:21 AM
this story rocks!~
Posted by: micheal | January 15, 2009 07:25 PM
THAT STORY WAS ALRIGHT IT WASNT RELII DAT SCARY U CUDA WROTE BETTER
Posted by: SHANNON AND ANNA | January 17, 2009 04:51 PM
this is one of best scary stories I have read.
Posted by: wanda | January 19, 2009 01:58 PM
ITS SO COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
Posted by: wanda | January 19, 2009 02:00 PM
this story is sooooooo great.i luv it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: sindi | January 24, 2009 01:09 PM
OMG!COOL STORY!how did she not be sad about her dead aunt & brothers,scared by her stepmom and bloody Mary?
Posted by: meghan | January 24, 2009 08:18 PM
not scary
Posted by: Anonymous | January 25, 2009 06:38 PM
WOW!WHAT A COOL STORY.IT WAS LIKE AWSOME DUDE:)
ME AND MY FRIEND WERE LIKE WHAOOOOOOOOOOOO:O
AWSOME DUDE:)
Posted by: marclla | January 26, 2009 02:25 PM
i loved this story it was so scary
Posted by: Anonymous | January 26, 2009 06:35 PM
i thought this story kept me on my feet i loved it. it was totally awesome
Posted by: Anonymous | January 28, 2009 10:06 PM
it wasnt very scary
Posted by: Elisabeth Marie | January 30, 2009 07:11 PM
OMG the story was great but kind sad how the boy did ya i was reely sad. But Berta was so ugly im like ya alil sad know it happens oga buy
Posted by: Kayla | February 1, 2009 07:10 PM
Hey ya'll! What's up? I thought this story was really good but I mean everybody makes mistakes. Everybody has those days and everybody know what I'm talking about Everybody gets that way! Peace!
XOXO,
Miley
Posted by: Miley Cyrus | February 1, 2009 07:13 PM
lalalalaa(:
i was sceeeerd.
great story btw !
Posted by: bob | February 2, 2009 08:46 AM
dis story is awsome i
Posted by: marisa | February 2, 2009 02:10 PM
omfg that was scary!!!!
Posted by: amanda | February 3, 2009 08:28 AM
OMJ*
GOOD STORY BUT IM GLAD GERTA DIED. AND DO YOU REALLY HAVE TO BE in the blood line TO CONTACT ANY SPIRIT when you try bloody marry!!!!!
Posted by: Alex | February 4, 2009 01:34 PM
that was really good...i enjoyed it...thanks
Posted by: Mark | February 8, 2009 09:36 PM
i am only 12 years lod and i am still scard of monsters and bloody mary.and i sleep with my mom and dad still
Posted by: selena wilkinson | February 9, 2009 12:15 AM
it was very infusiasked but it was horrible her killen the kids if i had step children i would not do that i would be nice to them it was funny how bloody marry got the lady well me and my freinds have been doing the cours at school we only seen he ones but the middle tolit at horton was lighting up really scary do u think?
Posted by: Billie-jo C hambers | February 14, 2009 10:31 AM
omg that was alsom i ♥ed it lol☻☻2☻☻☻
Posted by: RACHAEL | February 14, 2009 12:22 PM
NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!! SSSCARY
Posted by: Anonymous | February 14, 2009 09:42 PM
good story,not scary though:):(:/
Posted by: Anonymous | February 14, 2009 11:08 PM
Very intriguing, I enjoyed it a lot
Posted by: Jessie | February 15, 2009 06:02 PM
stupid, strange, but SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | February 16, 2009 08:52 PM
so scary and i will hate if she called me little kayla LOL!!!11!1!!!111!11!11!!11!!1!11!!11!11!!1!!11!!1!!1!11!11
Posted by: kayla | February 16, 2009 09:14 PM
thAT WASS boring
Posted by: Anonymous | February 20, 2009 09:03 PM
how the heck do you find the mirrors!
Posted by: Anonymous | February 22, 2009 10:34 AM
Love it! Thanks for sharing!
Posted by: Ben | February 23, 2009 11:53 AM
WOW COOL STORY!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | February 23, 2009 10:00 PM
i really loved this book
Posted by: marcos torres | February 24, 2009 09:53 AM
this story was the scaryest story that i have ever read u should read it 2 u will love as much as me !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: kadaja greene | February 24, 2009 10:00 AM
We read this story and it was really really really very very very boring and not scary at all!
Posted by: Aasta and Jayda | February 27, 2009 09:09 PM
OMG IT WAS A SUSPENCE BUT NOT SCARY I V BLOODY MARY I TRIED THE CANDLES BUT IT DOESNT WORK AT ALL SO YEA
KEWLL
Posted by: hanza | March 1, 2009 02:16 AM
this was not scary at all i hated it but keep going you all are awsome at writing keep going!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: william beers | March 2, 2009 03:50 PM
that was a good scary story! i have never found a story that accually interested me
Posted by: monica | March 3, 2009 03:58 PM
NOT SCARY AT ALL!!!!!! BUT IT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: maia DeForge | March 7, 2009 07:05 PM
boooooooo
Posted by: Anonymous | March 8, 2009 12:34 AM
I liked that but even though you cant sound effects would be better!!!! It's awsome though!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: twilight | March 8, 2009 12:47 AM
Well I thought it wasnt scary but it was definatly good! OMG I tryed bloody mary and she never got me! yea!!
Posted by: Sarah | March 9, 2009 03:54 PM
THAT STORY WAS BORING NOT EVEN SCARY
Posted by: ERIKA | March 9, 2009 06:23 PM
loved the story-who wrote it?
Posted by: Belle | March 9, 2009 10:46 PM
Very interesting story that makes you imagine the plot...
Posted by: Antoun | March 10, 2009 12:42 AM
it was a really scary story for me and my 3 year old brother and i listen to real scary stories and they r really scary and i mean really scary. alexis and andres
Posted by: alexis ruiz | March 10, 2009 05:17 PM
WOOT gerta got killed!i can amagine what it looked like and OMG scary,sad, irony,and true!WOOP
Posted by: Betty | March 13, 2009 08:19 PM
i love this story this was my favorite when i was yunger
Posted by: name | March 14, 2009 01:44 PM
I love the story of Bloody Mary return, I ♥ to read ghost stories continued making really awesome!
Posted by: Quynh | March 16, 2009 07:51 AM
Awsome love it !!!!!!! =)
=)
Posted by: Daniella | March 16, 2009 07:11 PM
OMG!!!!LOL!!!! THAT IS AN AWSOME STORY NOW I KNOW THAT SHE DOESNT DO ANY THING UNLESS UR IN CANDLE LIGHT!!!
Posted by: amanda | March 16, 2009 09:32 PM
this story was interesting...
Posted by: Joe Garcia | March 17, 2009 12:34 PM
WWWWOOOOWWWW THIS STORY IS REALLY COOOLLL BBBUUUUTTT NNNNOOOOTTTT SCARYYYY!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | March 17, 2009 01:15 PM
:D WOOOW :(
Posted by: JOHN | March 17, 2009 01:17 PM
the story was asome!!!
and the end was amazing!!!!!!!! peace
Posted by: jasmin82 | March 17, 2009 01:21 PM
that was brilliant
Posted by: Anonymous | March 17, 2009 03:31 PM
this story was scary for my little cousen this story was cool!!!!
Posted by: maria sillas | March 17, 2009 04:08 PM
nice
Posted by: Anonymous | March 17, 2009 05:00 PM
HEY PEOPLE THATN WAS LAME AND WAS NOT SCARY
Posted by: Anonymous | March 18, 2009 08:51 AM
that was lame and so not scary well bye
Posted by: alexis alberts | March 18, 2009 08:53 AM
that story was koo!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: EILEEN GARCIA | March 18, 2009 11:22 AM
this story was so random but totally awesome. i loved it, it was the most extraodanary story. now i know why bloody marry doesen't work when i do it in my house or in school with my friends. cool story!
Posted by: Anonymous | March 20, 2009 03:09 AM
alrigh.but i dont scare easily and im ten yrs old
Posted by: tori | March 20, 2009 06:16 AM
OMG!!!!!!! THAT WAS SOOOOO NOT SCARY BUT IT GAVE ME COLD CHILLS BUT I LOVED IT SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO BAD I PRINTED IT OUT
Posted by: KERI TRAMMELL | March 21, 2009 12:15 PM
horible worst story ever
Posted by: dyllon | March 26, 2009 11:18 AM
Thiz story was good i enjoyed reading it i have 2 say tat ur a great author wow.
Posted by: Anonymous | March 26, 2009 05:24 PM
Ok,
not to be mean but the storie was offle!!! i hated it...Not really but it wasn't scary! sorry im 9 years old and i adore violince!
Posted by: Lucy | March 26, 2009 08:30 PM
this story is not scry but kixnda good!!!!!
Posted by: samantha | March 28, 2009 03:12 PM
wow i was so scared
Posted by: victoria | April 5, 2009 04:47 PM
this storie was not scary but it was awsome i liked it but i hope they make a second one but it better be cool like the frist one my favorite part was when the step mother got killed and got sent to bloody mary and the girl was fighting for her freedom the part that was sad is when gerat killed the boys but the good thing is she died and will never come back won't even return thats wat i need to say peopleeeeessssss
Posted by: ?????????????? | April 6, 2009 04:54 PM
pretty good!
(not scary!!)
cool!
Posted by: Anonymous | April 7, 2009 11:27 AM
Great Story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Keith Bowyer | April 7, 2009 11:34 AM
This is a really good story but i dont know if it really could hppen probably not!
Posted by: Ella | April 7, 2009 11:44 AM
i couldnt be bothered to read it so next time try to put it on audio so poor people dont have to read it the r old
Posted by: fatu and zani | April 9, 2009 12:38 PM
This was a really crappy scary story I'm not scared by Bloody Mary
Posted by: Hannah | April 9, 2009 06:49 PM
the story is nice
Posted by: shy | April 9, 2009 07:13 PM
wow!!!! its really not that scary. well a little bit but its good
Posted by: gabie | April 10, 2009 08:37 AM
wow!
i love ghost stories this is awsome dude!
well done!
Posted by: jamie | April 12, 2009 04:25 AM
THIS STORY WUZ KIND KREEPY BT DA BEST PART WUZ DA ENDN' !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AGAIN AWSOME STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SCARY STORIES , MYSTERY, RULE!!!!!!!!!! DO I HATE READIN'!!!!!!!!
Posted by: GLORIA ITZEL | April 13, 2009 05:15 PM
Wow like it, I have seen the episode its supernatural! When you said it it makes a lot more sense but I think you changed it! Well done! XD
Posted by: Alyssa | April 15, 2009 06:55 AM
this sucked
Posted by: Anonymous | April 15, 2009 02:47 PM
this story was so stupid
Posted by: karina | April 15, 2009 05:04 PM
so cool not scary love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: justice | April 17, 2009 10:13 AM
OMG THIS IS SOOOOOOOO COOL BUT IT COULD BE JUST A LIL BIT MORE SCARIER! LOL BUT KEEP ON TELLING MORE GREAT STORIES!
Posted by: Anthony | April 17, 2009 11:51 PM
that storie was just great and i mean great i love that storie
Posted by: Anonymous | April 18, 2009 09:33 AM
THE STORY WAS AWSOME I LIKE WHEN BLOODY MARY KILLED GETRA
Posted by: TARON | April 18, 2009 11:58 AM
this story was wikid awsome dude. P.S,it was scary too!!!!!!!![loved it. love, alc(lexisnichole clark)
Posted by: lexis | April 18, 2009 04:38 PM
wow that was amazing i loved it!!
Posted by: julia | April 19, 2009 06:05 PM
i wasnt scared and thats why my pant r wet
Posted by: christina | April 19, 2009 06:53 PM
this story was interesting but deff. not scary!
Posted by: tiffany | April 19, 2009 07:01 PM
This wasnt scary but it made sense and it was really cool.
Posted by: Olivia | April 19, 2009 07:22 PM
omg this was kinda scary
Posted by: rylee | April 24, 2009 01:59 PM
i love the part where Gerda went with bloody mary that was great.
that was scary and i loved it.:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :0 :( :( :()
Posted by: jerrica | April 25, 2009 10:23 PM
Heh, heh, heh. that b*tch got what was coming to her!
Posted by: Nichole | April 26, 2009 02:59 PM
that was ssooooooooooooooo good!make more. its sad that charels & richard died! ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha Greta!
Posted by: emily | April 28, 2009 07:50 PM
OMG I LOVE YOU STORY IT WAS GOOD AND AWESOME BUT I WISH I HAVE A GOOD SCARY STORY
Posted by: danielle schulke | April 28, 2009 08:01 PM
I really really like yoir scary stories
Posted by: lil | April 29, 2009 11:12 AM
lol that was awesome
Posted by: Anonymous | April 30, 2009 03:23 PM
WOW!! that is so cool!! so awsome that Girta is good as gone!!! woohoo!!! LOL i think im a little to hyper!! Heehee!!
Posted by: Kandy | April 30, 2009 04:34 PM
it was so awesome and scary i love scary movies scary stories.
Posted by: Anonymous | May 2, 2009 05:25 PM
the was awsome and i loved the part where bloody mary came in that mirror it put chillsssss down my throat and back i hope mt ansetser did not burn her(bloody mary)body!!!!!!!!!
:( :) :( :) /:( :) :( :) :( :) :( :) :(
Posted by: jerrica | May 2, 2009 06:43 PM
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrhhhhhwoow
Posted by: Teri | May 3, 2009 11:06 AM
this story was cool. I cant wait till the next one comes out!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | May 4, 2009 11:52 AM
this story wuz awsome
Posted by: amber chavez | May 5, 2009 10:33 AM
omg!!!!!!! this story was of the hook! dam but it was scary at the same time.
Posted by: sindey | May 5, 2009 05:45 PM
cool and not really scary
Posted by: Anonymous | May 6, 2009 12:00 AM
OMG that was the koolest story ever!!!!!! I ♥ it :)(:
Posted by: juliette | May 6, 2009 09:58 AM
AAhhAHa!!!!!! sSsSoooOO sCarY......NoT.....Da Story Iz Gud Bt Itzz Nt Scaryyyy....YYuuuuYU NId To Go To Skullll Nd Learn Wt A Scariii Story Issss.....HaHaHaHaHaHaHa.........JJJKeeeE!!!!!.......
>>>tc
Posted by: aisha | May 7, 2009 04:29 AM
so dum you really beleave that crazy person!!!lier
Posted by: Anonymous | May 9, 2009 07:47 PM
boringg!!!!!
Posted by: kristina | May 9, 2009 08:08 PM
OOOOOOOO I OOOOOOOOOH!!!!! IM GONNA HAVE NIGHTMAres though............ O WELL!!!! IM A GHOST HUNTER IM USED TO IT!
Posted by: Andrew | May 10, 2009 03:34 PM
OMG i loved the story and i heard that you go to a bath room alone and turn off the lights and say bloody mary 3 times and she comes alive and hurt you
Posted by: amanda | May 11, 2009 07:47 PM
That was sooooo NOT scary Its a good story but that was not scary at all .You need to learn what a scary story is.!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Rachelle | May 13, 2009 08:03 AM
omg it was awsome i lovvvvvvvvvvvvve it#1!
Posted by: Anonymous | May 15, 2009 04:25 PM
OMG!!!!!!!! i love the story.it was scary and PERFECT i want to read another one right now
Posted by: nikkie | May 15, 2009 07:20 PM
omg first time mary rules XD
Posted by: emily | May 17, 2009 11:16 AM
not scary
Posted by: Anonymous | May 19, 2009 08:00 AM
OMG the best story ever! i lv it it is kinda scary lolx!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | May 24, 2009 02:35 AM
omg i thought it would freak me out but this was good
Posted by: jordyn | May 24, 2009 11:17 AM
HAY NICE JOB
Posted by: Anonymous | May 24, 2009 10:48 PM
i liked this story but it wasnt as scary as i thought it would be ! !
Posted by: urte & brenda | May 26, 2009 12:08 PM
wow i bet my 5 years old sister knows a scarerier story!
Posted by: Anonymous | May 27, 2009 01:56 PM
This stori was interesting i loved it but is was so0o0o0o0o0o0 not scary make scarier stories!!!!
Posted by: Elizabeth | May 28, 2009 12:23 PM
this not scary at all! i didn't like it! But i do beleive in BLoody Mary!
Posted by: Boo | May 28, 2009 05:28 PM
I enjoyed it...but you know children do this "Bloody Mary" thing because its a myth or legend... I wonder who really "Bloody Mary" is?
Posted by: Anonymous | May 29, 2009 05:06 AM
that was a good story people should read it
Posted by: Anonymous | May 29, 2009 02:44 PM
i didn't like it
Posted by: Anonymous | May 29, 2009 03:56 PM
haha. Stupid hag.
Got killed
serves her right
Posted by: Jessica | May 29, 2009 04:23 PM
It was a good one
Posted by: Anonymous | May 30, 2009 10:38 AM
poooooooooooooop crap poop
Posted by: Anonymous | May 30, 2009 04:03 PM
that was very scary!!!!!! I wouldn't read that alone in the dark
Posted by: eliza | May 31, 2009 01:43 PM
its real
Posted by: Anonymous | May 31, 2009 02:57 PM
this story was like a fether pillow very soft
Posted by: kiera gates | June 2, 2009 08:27 AM
nice but this is not scary you cant say you are mary you cant even spell it right
Posted by: Anonymous | June 2, 2009 09:13 AM
so cool
Posted by: Anonymous | June 2, 2009 09:33 AM
GRRRRRRRRRRRRRREAT STORY!!!!!! LUVD IT!!!
Posted by: Lindsey | June 2, 2009 05:09 PM
U spelled evil wrong.
Posted by: dominique | June 3, 2009 07:08 AM
yes i agree it wasnt scary but beautiful story..... it thaught it was gerta who is bloody mary....(at first i read it)
Posted by: secret | June 3, 2009 09:13 AM
omg so getto
Posted by: yo mama | June 3, 2009 11:47 AM
omg this is soooooo alsome loven it
Posted by: ben | June 3, 2009 11:49 AM
I LOVED IT!!!!!!! MAKE A SECOND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Taylor | June 4, 2009 02:48 PM
This is an awsome story
Posted by: monika | June 10, 2009 04:19 PM
i loved this story it was scary and awesome and i hope you can make a sequel for this sequel. im going to go buy your book
Posted by: katherine | June 12, 2009 05:27 PM
oh! it was great story!
spooky!!!
Posted by: suwira | June 13, 2009 11:56 AM
this story is so what ev
Posted by: Anonymous | June 18, 2009 11:39 AM
wow not scary but its true wow now thats scary
Posted by: jeri-dee | June 22, 2009 01:28 PM
wickied story. i emo n i got scared
Posted by: alistra | June 22, 2009 11:26 PM
aawwweeeesssssoooooommmmmmmeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: antionette adkins | June 23, 2009 01:18 PM
this is so scary.1 mor e night wit bloody mary
Posted by: ana | June 27, 2009 07:31 PM
I love this story, but for a second i thought marie was actualy bloody mary
Posted by: Gobbeer | June 29, 2009 11:56 AM
woow
Posted by: natalie | June 30, 2009 08:54 AM
Dat was cool... Not as scary. My friend and I thought. WE know a better Bloody Mary one.
Posted by: babi doll | July 2, 2009 09:36 AM
That was rubbish and quite boring and not scary at all
Posted by: Anonymous | July 6, 2009 08:49 AM
this wasmt scary at all sorry. im still bored. nothing ever scares me.
Posted by: Anonymous | July 6, 2009 08:21 PM
SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: madison | July 7, 2009 12:06 PM
Thats a very good story ...:]
Posted by: Anonymous | July 7, 2009 06:49 PM
Thats a very good story ...:]
Posted by: Anonymous | July 7, 2009 06:49 PM
that was awesome can i date you?
Posted by: ???? | July 8, 2009 01:14 PM
Wow this was amazing!!!
Posted by: Kittycakes524 | July 10, 2009 09:51 AM
ok that was good but not scary one bit. that was awesome when BLOODY MARY did her magic! :)
Posted by: amber jaramillo | July 10, 2009 10:25 AM
thats was wwwwwwwooooooooowwwwwwwww man
Posted by: lacey ramirez | July 10, 2009 01:25 PM
it was not scary at all
Posted by: momo | July 11, 2009 10:23 AM
it was ... AWESOME!
Posted by: Anonymous | July 15, 2009 08:33 PM
I'm really into scary stories, even if they don't scare me, and I thought this 1 was awsome!
Posted by: Marissa Fuller | July 16, 2009 03:16 PM
i wish i was marie
Posted by: carlina | July 18, 2009 12:19 PM
that was so kool but not as scary as mine stouy of
bloody mare
Posted by: amber | July 18, 2009 04:05 PM
this is so not scary
Posted by: lesly | July 18, 2009 11:47 PM
cool
Posted by: Anonymous | July 20, 2009 01:28 PM
THAT WAS PREETY CHILL BUT IT WAS LONG
Posted by: Anonymous | July 21, 2009 04:22 PM
the story was awesome i just hated that the 2 brothers had died but what i want 2 kno is what happened 2 the step mother
Posted by: iceeze | July 22, 2009 12:45 PM
it was so scary
Posted by: Anonymous | July 23, 2009 06:16 PM
this was not scary....bloody mary isnt even real....we tryied this at a birthday party.........sosoooooo sooooo not reall!!!!!!
Posted by: Rockelle Lease | July 23, 2009 10:18 PM
OMG THIS WAS THE BAST BLOODY MARY STORY TOLD YET!!! IT EVEN GAVE ME THE CHILLS!!!!!!!
Posted by: Rachel | July 24, 2009 10:35 AM
GREAT STORY! i like it but 2 bad 4 da bros ya kno well l8rz!
Posted by: paige | July 24, 2009 06:48 PM
that story was soooooo cool i liked the last bit when bloody merry cam from the mirror U SOO SHOULD MAKE A SECOND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: casey | July 27, 2009 02:19 AM
so boring it was CRAP made me go to sleep!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | July 27, 2009 09:12 AM
cool storie so wicked loved it
Posted by: Anonymous | July 27, 2009 12:37 PM
This was pretty scary but I ♥ed it! Make more! •_•
Posted by: Atalia | July 28, 2009 10:14 PM
Hey I love this story and it was so scary and I am glad she stuck up for her self and this story is so great (lol)!!!!
Posted by: Brittany | July 31, 2009 07:53 PM
OMG thats was soo scary that i couldnt finish it im so scary and wen i reading my mouse(the arrow)began to move as i was readin this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Posted by: sara | August 1, 2009 07:36 PM
hey this is an awesome story .
Posted by: ally | August 5, 2009 07:30 AM
most stories are scary. not this one. but it was still good,i still enjoyed it!
Posted by: kk | August 5, 2009 08:26 AM
it was not a bit scary and im not even 10 im 9
Posted by: lily2468 | August 6, 2009 10:35 PM
i loved it my sis is so scared
Posted by: Anonymous | August 8, 2009 03:04 PM
the story of bloody mary always scared me
Posted by: vanessa | August 8, 2009 11:26 PM
that was soOoOoOoOo ScArY!AWSOME
Posted by: angle | August 10, 2009 02:12 PM
Omg, so not scary i think itll have to happen in real life to no how its is :)
Posted by: fjgiotrg | August 11, 2009 12:51 PM
i loved it !
Posted by: michael-jeckson luvr | August 11, 2009 05:53 PM
it was great and a littel scray for my age /9/... i know that story is not even true/so wat it a littel creepy /but the creepest one is LA LLORONA or LA LLORONA KILLS HER KIDS/////////////SPOOKY
Posted by: Fernanda | August 11, 2009 06:48 PM
it was kind of dum and good /spooky at the same time
BLOODY MARY BLOODY MARY
BLOODY MARY......
MAke another.
Posted by: juzeail | August 12, 2009 11:29 AM
Dude, that totally wasn't scary! But dude! I TOTALLY LOVED IT!
Posted by: Morgan | August 13, 2009 10:13 AM
this story is so so so so so so so so so so so so so scare I wanted to buy it for 50$
Posted by: shannie | August 13, 2009 06:52 PM
I LOVE THE STORY IT IS THE BEST STORY EVER EVEN THOUGH IT WASNT SCARY AT ALL BUT ITS PERFECT FOR HALLOWEEN
Posted by: tahmin | August 14, 2009 12:38 PM
i love bloody marry i got to do that o my step mom lol i hate her to lol
Posted by: kyle t | August 14, 2009 01:53 PM
good not scary but good good beganing and end
Posted by: victoria | August 14, 2009 07:51 PM
yo
this is the real thing!!!1 i did bloody mary and its not real
for normal people
but i did it and it worked
cause i see dead people
Posted by: Christie Page | August 18, 2009 09:55 AM
thats a heck o a story that was kind of scary thanks for sharing
Posted by: stephanie | August 18, 2009 05:02 PM
thats a heck o a story that was kind of scary thanks for sharing
Posted by: stephanie | August 18, 2009 05:02 PM
I LOVE THAT STORY
its great
Posted by: dj | August 19, 2009 12:47 AM
Wow that was creepy i am sooo sending that to my friends in an email!!!
Posted by: Jemma | August 19, 2009 01:42 AM
need more scary put its cool
Posted by: shoenstatt | August 19, 2009 02:55 PM
good story
Posted by: ari | August 20, 2009 05:09 PM
i luv it i think it was sorta scary i luv bloody mary i wis she was real!!!!!
Posted by: megan | August 20, 2009 05:59 PM
this is not scary at all
Posted by: Anonymous | August 22, 2009 05:36 AM
I LUVVED DA STORIE EVEN THOUGH IT WASNT ALL DAT SCARRY BUT ENYWAYS IT WAS AN AWESOME STORIE ND I LIKED IT VERY MUCH
Posted by: chessy | August 22, 2009 11:50 AM
this story was awesome i just couldnt stand being away i scared the eff word out of my friends i cant belive they thought it was really real and we slept in a tent that night and when i woke up in the morning they were gone and i was like what the h*ll and they were in my room and i sceamed at the top of my lungs and they all woke up i scared the crap out of them
Posted by: Anonymous | August 23, 2009 05:50 PM
story is so creepy
Posted by: Anonymous | August 26, 2009 07:57 AM
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AND THIS STORY WAS SCARY
Posted by: jennfer hoang | August 26, 2009 07:50 PM
this story was LAME!!!not scary at all!!! STUPID:(
Posted by: Anonymous | August 26, 2009 08:59 PM
oh my god i am going to have a night mare
Posted by: Anonymous | August 28, 2009 11:47 AM
lol that was fuuny gerta got wat she desirved bloody marie acually did a good thing for once
Posted by: Kirstn | August 31, 2009 06:15 PM
o
Posted by: Anonymous | September 3, 2009 02:16 PM
F**K yeah that was awsome your the master of fright!!!!!!!!!...........
Posted by: brooke matthys | September 7, 2009 02:42 AM
liked it. a different twist on the whole 'bloody mary' tale
Posted by: sarah butterfield | September 8, 2009 06:39 AM
that story was awsome =).....
you neeed to come up with a nother one =)
Posted by: montana | September 10, 2009 05:43 PM
I read this and didn't think it was even that scary!!!! My friend read it first and told me that it was really creepy but I just thought it wasnt all that scary!!! lol!!!!
Posted by: Fyora | September 18, 2009 10:14 AM
this was a good story not so much scary but still i liked it
Posted by: shelby feltner | September 21, 2009 12:04 PM
boreding story i hate it
Posted by: Anonymous | September 22, 2009 12:23 PM
great story
Posted by: Anonymous | October 3, 2009 04:58 AM
that was ok it wasn't scary at all im lookin for a story to tell my class for halloween this is not my number 1 but if i dont find anything else it definetly will be!!! :D
Posted by: Hannah Bbz | October 3, 2009 01:55 PM
wow i really read all of it wow it was awsome but it wasnt scary !
Posted by: florence flores | October 6, 2009 05:17 PM
this stori was awsome
Posted by: Anonymous | October 8, 2009 12:37 PM
This was a o.k. stori
Posted by: D-mon | October 8, 2009 12:41 PM
This was awright
Posted by: A-mon | October 8, 2009 12:44 PM
wat's up this story was off the chain!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: K-Dog | October 8, 2009 12:47 PM
This story is amazing. I took it into my school at Longridge Towers School in Berwick to show my English class.
Posted by: Fiona | October 10, 2009 03:55 AM
it was carzy but not scarey
Posted by: Anonymous | October 11, 2009 03:24 PM
thi story wasent scary at all
Posted by: xoxoxox | October 11, 2009 05:09 PM
Hey! I LOVED the story!!LOL!
Posted by: Austin | October 12, 2009 08:02 AM
it is awesume!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: mary | October 13, 2009 10:38 AM
awesome dis story is so cool
Posted by: Lil drummer boy | October 13, 2009 11:52 AM
omg that was the stupidest story ever it wasnt even scary
Posted by: police | October 14, 2009 01:20 PM
Great story im only 11 and it didnt scare me at all
Posted by: abby | October 14, 2009 10:24 PM
SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: Anonymous | October 15, 2009 09:40 AM
good sotry omg
Posted by: bob | October 16, 2009 12:45 PM
lol
Posted by: Anonymous | October 17, 2009 04:14 PM
so boring
Posted by: Anonymous | October 17, 2009 04:49 PM
It was not scary but I was interested.
Posted by: Nikk | October 18, 2009 06:43 PM
hey....these are boring ...i like scary stories
Posted by: Anonymous | October 19, 2009 10:21 AM
This was the coolest story ever. Me and my friends tried it but it didnt work im glad knowing wat couldve happend scarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry
Posted by: Tabitha Taylor | October 19, 2009 04:32 PM
WHO EVER THINKS THIS IS SCARY IS A LITTLE TINY MOUSE NO AFENCE BUT IT WASNT SCARY TO ME
Posted by: BETTINA | October 19, 2009 07:29 PM
this story waz da bom i lik luv it tht waz some feaky stuff
Posted by: danny | October 20, 2009 07:57 PM
OMG OMG OMG. so cool..hehehehehehehehehe!!!i wannna read it ova n ova again. but, make it a lil scarier. dere was no HEAD GETN CHOPPED N STUFF =( OH WELL :)
Posted by: Anonymous | October 22, 2009 09:17 AM
lily-it was ok to me but im the scary monster i dont get scared of everything but this scared me a little
Larissa-yea it was pretty scary but i have heared way more scary stories than that one but,yea cool.
Posted by: lily and larissa | October 24, 2009 09:50 PM
This story was awesome.Wow. I havent heard a good one in while
Posted by: Alondra | October 25, 2009 05:39 PM
HEY!OMG! I LOVED THIS STORY I HAVE ALWAYS WONDERED WHY THAT DIDNT WORK AT SKOOL...
Posted by: ~BABYGURL~ | October 25, 2009 11:00 PM
not to great
Posted by: Anonymous | October 26, 2009 04:14 AM
not scary :(
Posted by: death meadows | October 27, 2009 09:37 AM
wow this story was tight
Posted by: jose | October 27, 2009 04:13 PM
..Intresting..not as 'scary' as I would of assumed. The idea, however, is very creative. Poor thing the two brothers lost their life...
Posted by: staying AnonomouS | October 28, 2009 03:35 PM
scaryyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
Posted by: ashley | October 28, 2009 04:55 PM
I AM SO READING THIS STORY ON HALLOWEEN NIGHT
Posted by: ERIN | October 29, 2009 10:48 AM
Scary story, but a good one too! I might tell this at school tomorrow
Posted by: pmk28888889832 | October 29, 2009 01:55 PM
this thing was so not scary it was f***ng hilarious d**m straight
Posted by: bloody mary | October 29, 2009 07:05 PM
it is spectaculer
Posted by: shambly | October 29, 2009 11:44 PM
that was so true trust me ive seen her before
Posted by: chelsea | October 30, 2009 02:29 PM
I live in Montana!OMG!SO CREAPY!
Posted by: Kayla | October 30, 2009 05:56 PM
This is the best story ever! It is NOT scary at all. I loved this story soo much. I read Bloody Mary and Bloody Mary Returns to my little sis. She freaked! = D
Posted by: Ashleigh | October 30, 2009 08:11 PM
awesome stori
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2009 08:03 AM
wow that was awsome not really scary tho.:(
and go to fake when bloody mary reached her arms out and gerta burst into flames
Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2009 09:47 AM
this was a _w_e_s_o_m_e_
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Posted by: Anonymous | October 31, 2009 10:54 AM
This story is awsome!!!!!!!
Posted by: DIANA | October 31, 2009 04:19 PM
that was a great story.lol you should make another one.that was a scary story.I wish I was Bloody Mary.
Posted by: Isabella | October 31, 2009 07:37 PM